Pitch Reflection

Pitch Reflection

Extra Details About Presentation

I have some information about the storyline of the music video. There is a boy and a girl that are currently together and the guy is a player  and he goes form women to women cheating on his wife but to make sure that the music video would be appropriate I have decided to add a twist instead of the man achieving his goals at the end of the music video which is going home with the girl instead am going to have the three girls that he cheated with gang up on him and at the end the three girls go home happy with each other and the man gets left behind obviously in a bad mood but then another twist will occur and you will see the man getting a phone call from another girl he smiles at his phone and then walks off into the distance. I have decided to change the location to a better place because I was just going to film it on Chadwell Heath lane but i thought to make it more interesting I would film it on the streets of central London as it would pleasing for the audience to watch and its busy which would make my music video much better.

Strengths Of Presentation

I think the audience thought my strengths were the artist’s persona as it exemplifies how my actor is going to be seen as it also shows the type of genre my music video will be. I also think that my storyline was a good base to work from as it would be entertaining to watch I have now built other ideas from this base to make it much better. My ethnicity was mostly black and I thought this would be effective because most people who listen to hip hop music are black and this is why the audience thought this was a suitable decision. My music video was also clear which made it easy to understand as the music video was narrative music video this makes it interesting for the audience when watching it as allows them to follow upcoming events with in the music video. I also used a range of different shot types to make the music video appealing to the audience as they would not just be looking at one type of shot all the time.

Improvements Of Presentation

The audience thought I could have expanded on my storyline as it was very simple. I used their questions to expand on my storyline and come up with a new and better one. The audience also thought that I should have been careful with the voyeurism aspect with in my music video as I had to be sensible on how far to go with the voyeurism I have took this feedback and have adjusted some parts in my music video to make sure it is appropriate to watch as it is in control of the school and I can only take it to a certain extent. I also think that I could have chosen better locations as they were quite simple. I was planning to do part of the filming on chadwell heath lane but instead I am going to change it to an exciting place to make sure the audience do not get bored so I was planning to film it in London or somewhere with the same energy to keep my audience interested.

 Changes You Will Make To Music Video

I will be changing the storyline of the music video as I thought it was sexist in a way. So now instead of the girl going home with the man at the end of the night I will have her throw a drink in his face and storm off alongside with another women he has been seeing. At the end I the man will get a phone call from another woman and walk off smiling. I have also changed the locations as they were quite simple and not very interesting. I will be making these changes because I thought some of the ideas would not be appropriate for the viewers of the school and i also thought that it would be better and more interesting for the audience watch.